The job description taken from the website of the company:
Analysts fulfil a multitude of roles across the business. To become an Analyst, you need to have performed well in your undergraduate degree and possibly have a Masters. For a full-time role, work experience gained through internships will be an advantage. You should be highly numerate, with strong communication skills. Fluency in more than one language is an asset for some roles and the ability to work as part of a team is essential.
My Application Letter
[My Address Here]
2nd September 2010
Roy Powers
Human Resource Department
[Company]
[Address of the Company]
Dear Mr Powers:
I am writing to apply for the position as an Analyst in your organization. I got to know about the position opening during the recruitment talk at National University of Singapore last Wednesday and I am interested in working for this position.
As a graduate from the National University of Singapore with a Bachelor of Science degree majoring in Physics, I have been exposed very much to quantitative analysis and have developed acute sensitivity to numbers and am able to make logical deduction from the data sets given. The position requires strong research and analysis skills and I believe that my training in the field will allow me to perform and produce useful results for the organization.
I appreciate your time in reading my application letter and I look forward to your reply. I have attached my resume in the letter. Please feel free to contact me at [my HP number] or email me at [my email address] should you need me to furbish you with more information. Thank you.
Analysts fulfil a multitude of roles across the business. To become an Analyst, you need to have performed well in your undergraduate degree and possibly have a Masters. For a full-time role, work experience gained through internships will be an advantage. You should be highly numerate, with strong communication skills. Fluency in more than one language is an asset for some roles and the ability to work as part of a team is essential.
My Application Letter
[My Address Here]
2nd September 2010
Roy Powers
Human Resource Department
[Company]
[Address of the Company]
Dear Mr Powers:
I am writing to apply for the position as an Analyst in your organization. I got to know about the position opening during the recruitment talk at National University of Singapore last Wednesday and I am interested in working for this position.
As a graduate from the National University of Singapore with a Bachelor of Science degree majoring in Physics, I have been exposed very much to quantitative analysis and have developed acute sensitivity to numbers and am able to make logical deduction from the data sets given. The position requires strong research and analysis skills and I believe that my training in the field will allow me to perform and produce useful results for the organization.
I appreciate your time in reading my application letter and I look forward to your reply. I have attached my resume in the letter. Please feel free to contact me at [my HP number] or email me at [my email address] should you need me to furbish you with more information. Thank you.
Yours Sincerely,
Tan Da Yang
Hi Dayang,
ReplyDeleteYour application letter is concisely written and looks appealing to the reader. I remember seeing your resume with great achievements in Olympiad Mathematics if I am not wrong, perhaps you can "sell" yourself using this since you excel in Maths and Science since young.
If possible, try to find out more about the company and its latest development. Thereafter, discuss how your skills and strengths can be applied to it.
Hopefully my comments are helpful.=)
Hello Dayang,
ReplyDeleteYour letter is well written and good paragraphing. The main points are effectively delivered to readers.
I feel that it will be better if you can include some of your past experience which related to your soft skills such as communication, time management or teamwork spirit. Your language proficiency can be included also. If the employer have no time to scheme through your resume, at least he/she would know your ability.
Good luck in editing your letter. ^.^
Hello!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comments! =D
Hi Dayang,
ReplyDeleteYour resume well written. It is simple and concise. For improvements, perhaps to better suit the requirements of the job, you can highlight your communication skills through the society you take part in.
Hi Dayang,
ReplyDeleteYour application letter is concise and easy to read. However I feel that it lacks a little in terms of creating a lasting impression. If possible try to include one or two achievements to substantiate your skills. I think Olympiad Mathematics is a good choice to use and can create an impression. As your readers may remember you as the "physics with Olympiad maths guy" rather than simply "the guy with a physics degree".
Hey Dayang,
ReplyDeleteThe first thing that came to my mind was that your application letter is too short and lacks information about yourself to leave a lasting impression on the reader.
This phrase, "I am interested in working for this position" sounds like you are trying to work for the position of an Analyst. You might wanna rephrase it to, "I am interested in the position..."
This phrase, "my training in the field will..." sounds as if you were literally training in the field. I understand what you are trying to say, but you might want to rephrase it so it does not sound confusing.
One more thing, there is no particular company you are writing to? There should be a target organisation so that you can research on the company and write some stuff on how you can contribute to the needs of the company.